As I enter my room I throw my bag on the bed and begin taking out my books. All of a sudden I remember that it's a Wednesday and that I have dance classes on Wednesdays. A sense of relief runs through my body as the worry of finishing homework immediately vanishes. I rush to get my dance clothes on, grab my bag, and run to the car. The first thing I see is my mom waiting in the car with a smile on her face. It feels as if it took no more than 10 minutes to go from my house to the dance studio. I jump out of the car and wave goodbye.
I couldn't wait much longer. I open the door while I see my dance teacher and friends greet me. They all think I'm a relaxed and stress- free person, but they don't know what really goes on in my head. I carry-on and put on my rock- hard pointe shoes. While I wrap each ribbon around my ankle, I couldn't help but laugh as I hear my teacher talk about her exciting day. I finish by wrapping a flowy pink skirt around my waist and walk to my spot on the barre. After everyone is done warming up, we begin a combination. She demonstrates as the class repeats. Loud shouts of corrections don't seem to bother me as I zone out into my own little world. I feel I can express myself with every move I take. This is what I look forward to everyday I'm here.
Whether it's ballet, tap, contemporary or jazz, I feel like I can be my self while I'm dancing. No one is there to tease me or tell me I look silly. I know that when I leave this place I can go home with a positive attitude. Homework can be finished in a more stress-free manner. This dance studio has been there for me from when I started as a toddler, to my teenage self. There is no other place for me to express myself other than my dance studio.
GREAT START! YOU MAY WANT TO ADD A LITTLE MORE OF THE FEELING YOU GET WHEN YOU ARE DANCING. ADD MORE SENSORY DETAIL TO THAT DESCRIPTION SO WE CAN CLEARLY SEE WHY DANCING IS SO SPECIAL TO YOU. MAYBE EVEN ADD HISTORY, HOW LONG YOU HAVE BEEN DOING IT AND WHY. MS(3)
ReplyDeleteGood Job! I could really visualize your environment. Also, liked how you described your reaction to our environment and the people in it. The only thing I think you could do was describe the dance studio a little more. Show us what is at the studio and how it helps you.
ReplyDeleteYour essay was very detailed, and very visual. I could imagine in my head. Although, I think that you could add a bit more sensory details, so it's even more visual.
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