Sunday, November 16, 2014

Risky Business: Final Draft

With technology evolving every blink of an eye more and more teens are seeing the need to change along with it. They may see it as a way to connect and be with their friends without actually being around them. The invention can have its perks, but for some obsessed users it can create changes in their mental, emotional, and physical health. Comparing the effects from teens spending too much time on their cell phones, it would be to their benefit to limit the use because of the sleep deprivation, bad study habits, and lacking direct social skills.

      Cell phones are well known for causing sleep deprivation in teens. According to an article published in the Annenberg Digital News, radio frequency wave energy that comes from mobile phones lead to insomnia, the inability to sleep. Sleep is a vital source of energy for the coming days. In order to be alert and focused for daily tasks you must have a good night's rest. One in three teens sends more than 100 text messages a day or 3000 texts a month. Susanne Phillips, a psychologist, states that teens that use their cell phones to text are 42% more likely to sleep with their phones than teens who own phones but don't text.  In most cases, adolescents sleep with their phones beneath their pillow in order to have the status of being "available". Late night messages or calls lead for those on both ends to be at lack of rest. The best way to get enough hours of sleep every night is to turn off your phone at least an hour prior to sleeping and keeping it 9 feet away in order to not be affected by radiation. Sleep is a way to rejuvenate and replenish your body for whatever the day might bring. Don't let a modern invention ruin that.

      High school is a crucial time in a person's life. It's important that they do well through studying and other school work. Cell phones could be the distraction that will jeopardize a teen's performance. A research from Kent State University showed that "high frequency users" were more likely to multi-task, a habit that has already been linked to lower grades in school. In a situation where a person is studying material they find difficult they are often drawn to non-academic activities, one of them being to log on to their smartphones. Researchers say the risk is that developing brains can become more easily habituated than adult brains to constantly switching tasks – and less able to sustain attention. Concentration is key to doing well in all areas of study. It has been proven that cell phone usage is linked to GPA and anxiety. The more obsessed you are the lower your GPA and higher your anxiety. In order to improve those test scores turn off those phones and open those books.

      The way in which teens communicate is changing, and not for the better. They could be surrounded by their closest friends, but still find a way to end up on their cell phone. The tiny screen has a way to ruin a relationship. Its often difficult to connect with someone on a personal level when they are distracted by their phone. The many social, instrumental, and entertainment options phones offer often draw the attention of teens from the current environment, whether they are alone or in a crowd. A study led by Scott Campbell, an assistant professor of Communication Studies, hypothesized that frequent cell phone users would be less likely to talk with strangers in public settings due to the tendency of cell phones to reduce interpersonal interactions. Teens in this generation need to experience life without constant dependence on these devices, like how their parents or grandparents grew up. They need to understand a phone is not the only way to be connected with others.

      Looking at how the use of cell phones affect teens, it would be clever to limit its use because of the lack of sleep, bad study habits, and destroyed direct relationships. The introduction of these devices has changed our society for the worst, but some may argue otherwise. Parents feel safer when  their teen has a phone at all times. Its a way to constantly know where they are and to be alarmed when there is an emergency. Its like a compact computer that gives teens information at their fingertips. They could use it to find information with school assignments or just curiosity. As you can see, smart phones has its good sides, but it all depends on the user. You can abuse it or you can make the best out of it. What kind of smart phone user are you?

Sunday, November 2, 2014

Risky Business: Rough Draft

      With technology evolving every blink of an eye more and more teens are seeing the need to change along with it. They may see it as a way to connect and be with their friends without actually being around them. The invention can have its perks, but for some obsessed users it can create changes in their mental, emotional, and physical health. Comparing the effects from teens spending too much time on their cell phones, it would be to their benefit to limit the use because of the sleep deprivation, bad study habits, and lacking direct social skills.

      Cell phones are well known for causing sleep deprivation in teens. According to an article published in the Annenberg Digital News, radio frequency wave energy that comes from mobile phones lead to insomnia, the inability to sleep. Sleep is a vital source of energy for the coming days. In order to be alert and focused for daily tasks you must have a good night's rest. According to Science Daily, many teens develop an addiction to their cell phone and feel a group pressure to remain connected and reachable around the clock. In most cases, adolescents sleep with their phones beneath their pillow in order to have the status of being "available". Late night messages or calls lead for those on both ends to be at lack of rest. The best way to get enough hours of sleep every night is to turn off your phone at least an hour prior to sleeping and keeping it 9 feet away in order to not be affected by radiation. Sleep is a way to rejuvenate and replenish your body for whatever the day might bring. Don't let a modern invention ruin that.

      High school is a crucial time in a person's life. It's important that they do well through studying and other school work. Cell phones could be the distraction that will jeopardize a teen's performance. A research from Kent State University showed that "high frequency users" were more likely to multi-task, a habit that has already been linked to lower grades in school. In a situation where a person is studying material they find difficult they are often drawn to non-academic activities, one of them being to log on to their smartphones. Researchers say the risk is that developing brains can become more easily habituated than adult brains to constantly switching tasks – and less able to sustain attention. Concentration is key to doing well in all areas of study. It has been proven that cell phone usage is linked to GPA and anxiety. The more obsessed you are the lower your GPA and higher your anxiety. In order to improve those test scores turn off those phones and open those books.

      The way in which teens communicate is changing, and not for the better. They could be surrounded by their closest friends, but still find a way to end up on their cell phone. The tiny screen has a way to ruin a relationship. Its often difficult to connect with someone on a personal level when they are distracted by their phone. The many social, instrumental, and entertainment options phones offer often draw the attention of teens from the current environment, whether they are alone or in a crowd. A study led by Scott Campbell, an assistant professor of Communication Studies, hypothesized that frequent cell phone users would be less likely to talk with strangers in public settings due to the tendency of cell phones to reduce interpersonal interactions. Teens in this generation need to experience life without constant dependence on these devices, like how their parents or grandparents grew up. They need to understand a phone is not the only way to be connected with others.

      Looking at how the use of cell phones affect teens, it would be clever to limit its use because of the lack of sleep, bad study habits, and destroyed direct relationships. The introduction of these devices has changed our society for the worst, but some may argue otherwise. Parents feel safer when  their teen has a phone at all times. Its a way to constantly know where they are and to be alarmed when there is an emergency. Its like a compact computer that gives teens information at their fingertips. They could use it to find information with school assignments or just curiosity. As you can see, smart phones has its good sides, but it all depends on the user. You can abuse it or you can make the best out of it. What kind of smart phone user are you?

Monday, September 22, 2014

UC Berkley Essay: FINAL

Describe the world you came from – for example, your family, community or school – and tell us how your world shaped your dreams and aspirations.

      Knowing my parents moved to the United States from China, unfamiliar with the culture and language, I had a feeling it would affect me in all ways possible. They taught my brothers and I everything within their range of knowledge, for example, Chinese traditions, manners, etc. However, in areas dealing with the English language or anything American, it was just so out of their reach. I wished I could have been more exposed to things outside of their comfort zone, but it was hard. After all, I was raised as if I was born in China because that is what my parents grew up in. That did not prepare me for life in the United States. I lacked certain skills that most kids are taught at an instant.  Do not get me wrong. I valued the cultural traditions, manners, and language they taught me. It helped me develop pride and respect towards my ethnicity. In the end, I appreciate what they had to offer, but in most cases it just was not enough. 

      When it came to school it was a dreadful six hours of my day. Immediately, I was behind from most of my classmates, being required to take special classes to help me improve my English. They were not to my liking and separated me from my friends. The feeling of being left out lingered for a while. Instead of allowing my emotions to get to me I was encouraged to work harder to overcome this obstacle. My parents were never strict in making sure I get my work done or that I get straight-A's. One of the reasons was because they did not have the knowledge to guide me like they wanted to. Instead they sort of just let me take care of what I needed to do and be in charge of my own learning. They thought that without pressuring me I would become the person I would want to be. Someone they would be proud to call their daughter. In a short period of time I was told I could return to my normal classes because I reached the same level of knowledge as those the same age as myself. Within a few months I was able to accomplish something others take years to overcome. Soon enough I was one of the top students in my grade. I could not be any more ecstatic. This was the event that really jump-started me being confident in myself. It made me realize I was capable of great things as long as I had a great desire to.

      Nonetheless, I was constantly being underestimated, even with my own aunties, uncles, and cousins. They knew the conditions I grew up in, so they created false accusations to bring me down. I would often tell them the life I fantasize about when I become an adult. Describing my dream car, house, job and so much more. I needed them to support me through my future plans, but that was not always the case. They would begin by saying how I was stupid enough to think it will ever happen and how I was not fit to carryout that lifestyle. Sometimes it was not as direct as that, but I knew they were thinking something along those lines. Their comments did not benefit me in any way, but bring me to tears unnecessarily. I knew I was not what they described me as and I showed that in my elementary years. I wanted to accomplish something beyond their standards of me to really prove them wrong. Whenever I heard a negative comment anger would rush inside me, trying to hold back and not explode. I did not want them to know how I actually felt. Instead, I put all that energy to my studies. For them to see me excel is all I ever wanted.  

     They underestimated me, my own family. That is something I never expected from the people I loved. Regardless what they said, I could not let it get the best of me. I took their negative comments and used it as an opportunity to for them to see me improve. I had to begin with English, the basis of everything. Everyday, whether it was before or once I got home from school, I would spend hours watching TV, and not just for fun or to get away with not doing homework, but to listen and comprehend what they were saying. Educational shows on Disney, Nikelodeon, and PBS is what I lived off of. It might not seem like much, but believe it or not, it gave me the knowledge to learn an entire language on my own. That's something I never thought I was ever capable of. Of course that is not all I did. I took initiative everywhere I went. Starting conversations with others was how I applied what I learned to the real world. This went on until I reached a point where everything about the language became second nature. I was determined. And when I am determined I do not back down until what I want is fulfilled. At an early age I set goals for myself. Goals that seemed quite extreme, but were necessary in my situation. Over the years, the negativity I received no longer bothers me. I found a way to block it out and move on with my life.

     My parents did not give me enough of what I needed in life, like social skills, knowledge about American customs, or the language, but I could not blame them. All I could do was make the best of it and learn from my experiences. As the years went by, I began to think about my future. College, a job, and starting a family. I began fantasizing about what a perfect life would be like, had a reality check, then created mental goals in my head to hopefully achieve in the surprisingly-near future. Thinking about what I had to go through as a kid I could not imagine having my own children going through the same or something even close. I have been through it and, sure enough, it was not fun, almost stressful at times. I made it a must that I attend a university to further my knowledge in a particular area. Obtaining a well-paying job is what I feel is the most important to support my family in all their wants and needs. I will make it my duty to give my family the lives I was never exposed to. Although my parents didn't raise me how I would have liked them to, it shaped me into the person I am today.

Friday, September 12, 2014

Word Choice Olympics

1. One day, Johnny, Maria, and Natalie were celebrating their mother's birthday. With a father enlisted in the military they tend to value their mother the most while he is gone. There they are, minding their own business, socializing, while all of a sudden they hear a scream. It came from their mother. A cry of happiness. In the corner of their eye they see their father peak out from the slight opening of the door. Without hesitation they ran out the door and into his arms, yearning for the comfort of the person they haven't been with for almost 6 months. Their life felt complete, finally being united as a family.

2. Lindy was currently at the location where a shooting had occurred a few hours ago. While trying to avoid stepping on blood with her brand-new shoes, she put on her gloves and began scouting the premises for valuable evidence. Halfway through the investigation she heard a faint sound of someone knocking. Knowing she was the only one at the scene, nervousness caused her to rapidly drop what she was working on and turn her head. A man completely dressed in black along with a mask only revealing the eyes stood by the door holding a gun pointed at Lindy. Instantly she knew who it was and didn't think twice before taking out her gun and pointing it at the murderer for self defense.

3. All the years of dedication to the sport of volleyball lead up to this exact moment.With this being USA's first game they needed to start off with a bang, no regrets. It is the last set of the game and the score is 21-21 with 30 seconds left on the clock. With the audience on the edge of their seat Brazil went ahead for the serve. Watching it float across the net, USA dove in with a bump, then a set, and finally a kill. The crowd roared louder than ever as the winning team jumped for joy into each other's arms.


     Jennifer and Anna have been the closet of friends since diaper days. They grew up, learned, and been through tough times together. When it was time to begin applying for colleges there was no doubt they would try to get accepted by the same universities. Months of anticipation flew by until one day, they both received letters from the University of California Irvine. The next day at school, with letters in hand, they met up to reveal the news together. As they rip the envelope open and pull out the crisp piece of paper, they began to read. Their screams of excitement were almost unison as they found out they were admitted. 


     Carly was a devoted wife to her husband, who has been dealing with cancer for the past year. It was a normal day. She never anticipated for anything wrong to happen. During work she received a phone call from the hospital saying her husband needed to be taken in for an emergency surgery. She didn't know what to think, but instead, she rushed to the hospital as quick as she could. By the time she got there it was too late. The nurses explained how the surgery was unsuccessful. She felt like an enormous hole just punctured her heart with no hopes of recovery. All she could do was sit in the cafe , lay her head on the table, and cry.

Monday, September 8, 2014

College Essay: DRAFT

UC Berkley:
Describe the world you came from – for example, your family, community or school – and tell us how your world shaped your dreams and aspirations.

      Knowing my parents moved to the United States from China, unfamiliar with the culture and language, I had a feeling it would affect me in all ways possible. They taught my brothers and I everything within their range of knowledge, for example, Chinese traditions, manners, etc. However, in areas dealing with the English language or anything American, it was just so out of their reach. I was raised as if I was born in China because that is what my parents are used to. I lacked certain skills that most kids are taught at an instant. That means if I wanted to learn something different, like English, it had to be on my own and most of the time it wasn't easy. I appreciate what they had to offer, but in most cases it just wasn't enough. 

      When it came to school it was a dreadful six hours of my day. Immediately, I was behind from most of my classmates. I had to be placed in special classes that weren't to my liking and separated me from my friends. Instead of feeling downgraded I was encouraged to work harder. My parents were never strict in making sure I get my work done or that I get straight-A's. They sort of just let me take care of what I needed to do. Let me be in charge of my own learning. Without pressuring me was the best way for me to become successful. In a short period of time I was told I could return to my normal classes because I reached the same level of knowledge as those of my own age. Within a few months I was able to accomplish something others take years to overcome. I was proud of myself. Soon enough I was one of the top students in my grade. This was the event that really jump-started me being confident in myself. It made me realize what I was capable of if I put my mind to it. 

      Nonetheless, I was constantly being underestimated, even with my own aunties, uncles, and cousins. They knew the conditions I grew up in, so they created false accusations to bring me down. It didn't benefit me in any way, but put me to tears unnecessarily. I knew I was not what they described me as and I showed that in my elementary years, but they weren't the people I would tell everything to. I wanted to accomplish something beyond their standards of me to really prove them wrong. Something crazy like graduating as summa cum laude or even valedictorian. Till this day I am still in the works at achieving those goals.

They underestimated me, my own family. That's something I never expected from the people I loved. Regardless what they said, I couldn't let it get the best of me. I took their negative comments and used it as motivation. I had to begin with English, the basis of everything. Everyday, whether it was before or once I got home from school, I would spend hours watching TV, and not just for fun or to get away with doing homework, but to listen and comprehend what they were teaching. Educational shows on Disney, Nikelodeon, and PBS is what I lived off of. I know it might sound so childish, but believe it or not, it gave me the knowledge to learn an entire language on my own. That's something I never thought I was ever capable of. Of course that is not all I did. Starting conversations with others was how I applied what I learned to real life. I was determined, and when I am determined I do not back down until what I want is fulfilled. At an early age I set goals. Goals that seemed quite extreme, but were necessary in my situation.

     My parents did not give me enough of what I needed in life, but I could not blame them. All I could do was make the best of it and learn from my experiences. As the years went by, I began to think about my future. College, a job, and starting a family. I began fantasizing about what a perfect life would be like, had a reality check, then created goals in my head to hopefully achieve in the surprisingly-near future. Thinking about what I had to go through as a kid I could not imagine having my own children going through the same or something anywhere along those lines. I have been through it and, sure enough, it was not fun, almost stressful at times. I made it a must that I attend university to further my knowledge in a particular area. Obtaining a well-paying job is what I feel is most important to support my family in all their wants and needs. I will make it my duty to give them the lives I was never exposed to. Although my parents didn't raise me how it would have liked to, it shaped me into the person I am today.

Sunday, August 31, 2014

College Essay Prompts


Cornell University
The primary focus of your college interest essay should be what you intend to study at Cornell.
On the online Common Application Writing Supplement, please respond to the essay question below (maximum of 650 and minimum of 250 words) that corresponds to the undergraduate college(s) or school(s) to which you are applying.
If you are utilizing the Primary/Alternate admission option, you must complete an essay for both colleges/schools; please complete the essays that correspond to your primary and alternate choices.

College of Agriculture and Life Sciences: How have your interests and related experiences influenced the major you have selected in the College of Agriculture and Life Sciences?
College of Architecture, Art, and Planning: Why are you excited to pursue your chosen major in AAP? What specifically about AAP and Cornell University will help you fulfill your academic and creative interests and long-term goals?
College of Arts and Sciences: Describe two or three of your current intellectual interests and why they are exciting to you. Why will Cornell’s College of Arts and Sciences be the right environment in which to pursue your interests?
College of Engineering: Tell us about an engineering idea you have, or about your interest in engineering. Describe how your ideas and interests may be realized by—and linked to—specific resources within the College of Engineering. Finally, explain what a Cornell Engineering education will enable you to accomplish.
School of Hotel Administration: Hospitality is the largest industry in the world and includes sectors such as hotel operations, food and beverage management, real estate, finance, marketing, and law. Considering the breadth of our industry, please describe what work and non-work experiences, academic interests, and career goals influenced your decision to study hospitality management? How will these contribute to your success at the School of Hotel Administration?
College of Human Ecology: What do you value about the College of Human Ecology's perspective, and the majors that interest you, as you consider your academic goals and plans for the future?
School of Industrial and Labor Relations: Tell us about your intellectual interests, how they sprung from your course, service, work or life experiences, and what makes them exciting to you. Describe how these interests may be realized and linked to the ILR curriculum. 

UC Berkley
Prompt #1: Describe the world you came from – for example, your family, community or school – and tell us how your world shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Prompt #2: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplish makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are.

University of Washington
Choose from either A or B:
A: Discuss how your family's experience or cultural history enriched you or presented you with opportunities or challenges in pursuing your educational goals.
B: Tell us a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.